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March 25th, 2010 by Candace Havens
Over Used Words

I taught a class on my Write Workshop loop last year and the discussion came up about over used words. People began listing theirs and I tried to keep a list. I’m curious about this again as I go through the final draft of the new YA I’m working on. I find myself using the same action tags and many of the same words to describe things. Boring. That’s okay for a first draft when you’re trying to get the words down, but never for a final draft.

That’s the most time consuming part of me, and I have to thank my Thesaurus for most of the help. Many times the words below are an easy out and keep us from giving real detail, even if it’s one word, in our story. I’m horrible about saying, “THING.” It’s driven every editor I had crazy, and my professors at school. So I’m working on my THING problem. :) I also use “felt,” which doesn’t express anything at all. It’s a “telling” word.

There are many people who contributed to the following list, including my friends Rosemary Clement Moore and Nikki Duncan, as well as members of the Write Workshop loop. I hope you’ll add some of yours, and if you have any ideas for action tags that don’t include the the words, glance or look, please share. I can use all the help I can get. ;)

DISCLAIMER: I’M NOT SAYING YOU SHOULD NEVER USE THE WORDS BELOW. I’M SAYING THESE ARE WORDS WE SOMETIMES USE TOO MUCH. THAT IS ALL. THANK YOU.

only

just

-ly

even

that

was

is

could

would

had

option

small smile

smile(d)

began to

started to

as she

as he

noticed

realized

sighed

chuckles

shudders

large

small

the fact that

beautiful

grinned

glanced

eye(s)

look

looked

turned

really

finally

Eyebrow(s)

eye

Eyes

Lips

Stomach

Adrenaline

Tears

Heart

Smile /smiles /smiled

Smirk

Tremble

Glance

Fists

Stepped back

Whirled

turned

Emotion/s

Look

looked

Scan/ned

filters:

saw

felt

knew

realized

heard

thought

wished

mused

hoped

assumed

figured

supposed

turn into questions:

wondered

considered

was curious

as

-ing

spun/spin/spinning

bloom/bloomed

beautiful/beauty

handsome

Absolutely no colons whatsoever.

Watch excessive name use, especially for POV characters.

All but eliminate direct address.

Eliminate waves of “some feeling.”

No grimaces. Ever.

OK should be okay.

Move

Bring

Brought

Push

Pull

Press

Reach

Went

Came

Saw

Watched

Heard

Thought

Felt

Knew

Tasted

Smelled

There may be some dupes, because I compiled them from different people. But that should get us started. Oops, I think that’s one of those words. ;)

Related posts:

  1. Filtering Words
  2. When the Words Don’t Flow
  3. Words Matter, or Step Away from the Thesaurus

25 comments to “Over Used Words”

  1. Michael Bracken
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     · March 25th, 2010 at 8:17 am · Link

    Exclamation! points! are! often! overused!!!

    My personal bugaboos: “then” and “and then.”



  2. Staci Kilpatrick
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     · March 25th, 2010 at 9:26 am · Link

    Mine pet peeves are:

    Although, yadda yadda
    Occasionally, yadda yadda

    And the misuse of dashes, semicolons, commas, and colons!
    Do NOT get me started on the difference between bullets and numbered lists!



    • Candace Havens
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       · March 25th, 2010 at 9:38 am · Link

      Staci,
      I have the worst problem with commas. Seriously.



  3. Sybir St. John
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     · March 25th, 2010 at 9:46 am · Link

    Great list! I’ve been going thru my latest manuscript with a similar list. You have a few more for me to check on. Thank you!

    (And, I didn’t have a single ! in the entire thing, must be learning something subconsciously).

    ~S



    • Candace Havens
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       · March 25th, 2010 at 11:00 am · Link

      LOL on the ! That’s something from years of journalism. We just don’t use it. No one is every really that excited. LOL



  4. MarnieColette
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     · March 25th, 2010 at 10:01 am · Link

    Well
    As well
    as well as

    These just really annoy me.



  5. Nina Paules
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     · March 25th, 2010 at 10:36 am · Link

    Great List, Candice.

    The day I learned what commas (and the semi) could do for me was the best writer-day of my life.

    Over-used words (as a writer)
    It
    Then
    As

    Reader pet peeves: Any word I have to look up in the dictionary.

    Does anyone know of software that can ID overused words?



    • Candace Havens
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       · March 25th, 2010 at 1:57 pm · Link

      Nina, I don’t mind looking up the occasional word. I figure I should probably know them any way, but if I have to look up too many I’ll put the book down. :)



    • Jason
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       · March 25th, 2010 at 4:59 pm · Link

      I’ve been using a program called StoryMill to write my first novel in. I’m really loving it and one of the features is a its word frequency list.

      My top ten list is:

      1. Have
      2. Just
      3. Would
      4. What
      5. So
      6. Delara (main character)
      7. Didn’t
      8. Ercan (main character)
      9. Up
      10. Out



  6. jim duncan
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     · March 25th, 2010 at 12:44 pm · Link

    One thing I think to bear in mind is that these words aren’t necessarily bad either. Some of them are just wasted words which can easily and should be deleted, but some are often just fine…as long as you don’t overuse them. I wonder sometimes how much we as writers stress over some of these, when as readers, these kinds of words are generally overlooked and/or ignored. We run the risk sometimes of looking like we’re trying to hard to come up with different ways to say look, when in reality the reader pays little attention to those kinds of tags anyway. I think it only becomes an issue when as a reader, you actually notice something particular, such as seeing the word “look” or “looked” eight times in two pages.



    • Candace Havens
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       · March 25th, 2010 at 1:56 pm · Link

      Jim I think that is the point. None of them are bad words. Some of us “just” use them more than we should and it helps to know some key ones. :)



  7. kay-marie james
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     · March 25th, 2010 at 4:01 pm · Link

    I find these lists so silly, and the aspiring writers who think merely avoiding ten or twelve words will turn hackneyed, unskilled sentences into prose even sillier (really, more depressing). Words are like ingredients. Advocating against the use of a food without considering the recipe, the ultimate goal, is, without question, absurd. Would we ban carrots from all dishes because a few unskilled home cooks made inedible dishes that featured them? The words aren’t the problem. Inepitude is.



    • Jason
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       · March 25th, 2010 at 5:03 pm · Link

      WOW Kay-Marie that’s pretty harsh LOL. I don’t think any writer would ever think that by avoiding 10 words it will turn their novel in to a masterpiece. I agree words are like ingredients. It’s the finished dish that matters. However, even cooks have to learn which ingredients not to overuse.



    • Candace Havens
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       · March 25th, 2010 at 6:12 pm · Link

      Kay-Marie, As I mentioned before with Jim, I think you missed the point. The point isn’t to never use these words. It’s a list for those of us, who don’t always know when we are using them too much. I have a real problem with the words “thing,” “felt,” and “look,” and I don’t even see them in my manuscript. That’s the point. To give us clues to words that maybe we rely on too much, and they make us lazy writers.

      I’m sure you’re erudite and never have that problem, but some of us do. So we need silly lists to help us remember.



  8. Deborah Blake
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     · March 25th, 2010 at 6:52 pm · Link

    I have a bunch of these things, too :-)
    Really and *that* are my worst offenders. (I usually have to go through a ms numerous times to winnow out all the damned thats.) [I had an exclamation point at the end of that sentence...but I went back and took it out :-) ]

    I used a word mapping program a friend pointed me to online–you put your entire ms into it (select all and then paste) and it gave you a word map with the most used words largest. Looked, back, and like were big. Dang it all.



    • Candace Havens
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       · March 25th, 2010 at 7:29 pm · Link

      Deborah, I have a problem with those too. :)



      • Candace Havens
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        8.1.1
         · March 25th, 2010 at 7:30 pm · Link

        Oh and share that link for that word program if you have it. :)



  9. @jmartinlibrary
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     · March 25th, 2010 at 6:58 pm · Link

    My fave word is “feigned.” Kinda weird, huh?



    • Candace Havens
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       · March 25th, 2010 at 7:31 pm · Link

      You can take the librarian out out of the library, but … ;) I don’t think I’ve ever in my life used that word. But I’m going to now. :)



  10. Chantal Kirkland
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     · March 25th, 2010 at 7:27 pm · Link

    I think @jmartinlibrary is feigning. LOL! My worst offender in my current WIP is ‘head’…I wonder what that says about me…



    • Candace Havens
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       · March 25th, 2010 at 7:31 pm · Link

      Chantal, I’ve always wondered about you. ;)



  11. Laura Lee
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     · March 25th, 2010 at 8:25 pm · Link

    there



  12. Anonymister
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     · March 27th, 2010 at 10:24 pm · Link

    Good grief! I’m writing a manuscript with a first-person POV. The character is a field biologist (my background), and he uses his eyes all the time. In fact, he has lots of senses that he uses all the time. Why? Because it’s a story about how he lives and survives in a very strange world, and I need to describe it to you. That’s why.

    Second peevish whine: grinning. I like grinning, *especially* when it’s meant to be ambiguous. Is the character grinning at the joke, grinning at you for making a stupid joke, or scared that he didn’t get the joke, and grinning in hopes that this is the right response? In a first person POV, what if the protagonist doesn’t know just then what that ambiguous grin means? Oh yeah, that’s right. Omniscient third person is the only way to go. Sorry, I forgot.

    Third peevish whine: If you’re not into seeing, smelling, hearing, tasting, or feeling, then you have to describe reality in terms of what it is or was. Except that you don’t want to do that either. I guess my character doesn’t get to learn what his wine tastes like, or why the wonderful woman sitting next to him is so excited about it. Too bad.



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