GENREALITY


December 4th, 2009 by Rosemary
Enter, stage right, pontificating…

So, I’m watching Carmen on Ovation TV, and I love how in opera when a new character enters, he gets a whole song (or a verse, if he’s not that important) to introduce himself and illustrate his defining characteristic. Sometimes the other characters sing about him, too. Carmen enters and launches into her definitive aria about her philosophy of love. It’s sultry, seductive… and cynical as hell.  Boom. We know what we need to know about Carmen. *

Can you imagine what would happen if we introduced book characters this way?

Harry Potter entered the great hall at Hogwarts. The sorting hat said, “It’s Harry Potter, who the Dark Lord tried to kill but he survived and has been in hiding and now here he is, Harry Potter. Yes, Harry Potter!” [They repeat things a lot in opera.]

Harry climbed into a table to orate, as they all gazed up at him in various attitudes of interest (or in Draco Malfoy’s case, villainous contempt).  Harry was a tenor, so everyone knew he was a good guy. (Draco was a baritone; he was bad, but not as bad as the basso Voldemorte, who wouldn’t show up for another few acts.) “Yes! I’m Harry Potter.  Let me tell you what’s happened to me so far, and how I feel about it….” [Proceeds to do so]

Of course, we authors DO want to help the reader get a handle on our characters just as quickly. We just have to do it a lot more subtly.  Not that we need to know everything about them in the first page of their appearance. The only way you can get away with that kind of infodump is if you sing it.

My favorite example is the opening of Little Women, by Louisa May Alcott:
“Christmas won’t be Christmas without any presents,” grumbled Jo, lying on the rug.

“It’s so dreadful to be poor!” sighed Meg, looking down at her old dress.

“I don’t think it’s fair for some girls to have plenty of pretty things, and other girls nothing at all,” added little Amy, with an injured sniff.

“We’ve got Father and mother and each other,” said Beth contentedly from her corner.

I love the simplicity of this opening. It’s got a rhythm to it, and it defines each of these girls in one sentence, without going: “…said Jo, the grumpy one; …Meg, the vain one, …Amy, the snobby one; …Beth, the sweet one.

And look at what Jo says. Yes, it’s focused on presents, but her concern isn’t that she won’t have nice things. It’s that Christmas won’t be Christmas. That is, her idea of Christmas will not be there. And so much of Jo’s story is her clinging to what her IDEA of something in the face of a different reality.

Go look at a book that has a character that really stands out for you. Even if the first thing they say or do isn’t exactly iconic, how you first see the character will tell you a lot about them.

I’d love to see examples in the comments!

Happy writing!
Rosemary

* I could have introduced myself with a song, but it would lose something translated into text. Because that’s the other things about opera.  It loses a lot in transcription. I love how the subtitles on opera broadcasts go like this:

Carmen:  *sings for five minutes*
Subtitle:  Love sucks.

But yeah, I’m aware my first post on genreality probably says a lot about me. Maybe more than I intend!

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10 comments to “Enter, stage right, pontificating…”

  1. AnneV
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     · December 4th, 2009 at 10:16 am · Link

    Great 1st post! Thanks. Don’t have an example, but now I want to go revise the intro to my character now.



  2. Candace Havens
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     · December 4th, 2009 at 10:25 am · Link

    Welcome to the blog! Great post. And I think you did a lovely job introducing yourself. :)



  3. RKCharron
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     · December 4th, 2009 at 12:25 pm · Link

    Hi :)
    Thank you for the EXCELLENT example of characterization and introductions to the character. I am going to reread my favorites and see how they do it. I’ve read Little Women numerous times and never realized the characterization in those few lines.
    Thank you again,
    RKCharron
    xoxo



  4. nightsmusic
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     · December 4th, 2009 at 1:04 pm · Link

    Welcome! You’re among fine company here. And I think your first post introduced you perfectly :D



  5. Jess
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     · December 4th, 2009 at 4:56 pm · Link

    I love opera too. :) Welcome to GenReality!

    This is the first para in my WIP, which I think sums up, Dolly, the narrator, pretty well:

    “It has been eight months, three weeks, and two days since Mac died. I’ve tried to keep everything that I have learned straight for him, but I keep forgetting. The gin does that. So I’m going to tell it as I have come to understand it, how all the pieces fit together. It isn’t pretty, but neither was Mac.” –SHAMELESS ACTS OF GRIEVING



  6. Aliya
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     · December 4th, 2009 at 7:52 pm · Link

    Awesome first post! Love the seemingly random connections that actually make sense when you think about it. Which is almost scary :smile:

    P.S: Isn’t this smilie cute? :arrow: ;-) I have no use for him, but…still.

    ~Aliya



  7. jennifer echols
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     · December 4th, 2009 at 8:19 pm · Link

    Going in the other direction, Barbara Caridad Ferrer’s YA novelization of Carmen is coming out next fall and it’s set in DRUM CORPS! Carmen does not sing for five minutes but love still sucks… ;-)
    Great post Rosemary!



  8. Suzan H.
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     · December 5th, 2009 at 12:15 am · Link

    LOL Great post! I’ll have to remember that when a crit partner globs on backstory.

    (Because I would NEVER do something like that. :twisted: )



  9. Irene
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     · December 6th, 2009 at 8:49 am · Link

    Hi and Welcome. I agree, great first post.
    My first career was in opera so I really appreciated your remarks and had a good laugh.
    As I read it I was revising the opening of my novel. Thanks and keep them coming.
    With much appreciation,
    Irene



  10. Becke Martin/Davis
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     · December 8th, 2009 at 8:30 pm · Link

    Great first post!



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